Lumberjack and Friends to the Rescue!

April 27, 2020
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The plot needs rescuing.

He gets in an airplane and flies to Scotland to fix his aunt's roof. I'm not sure why he can't just send her money and hire someone in Scotland to help her. It'd probably be cheaper. Plus, he's a lumberjack. He cuts down trees; he doesn't fix roofs. He's not a roofer, that's a completely different job.

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Sometimes people need their roofs fixed. Or, fly across the world to do minor chores for your loved ones.

Krista the Superhero

April 20, 2020
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Averagehero.

This was written by an eight-year-old. It's obvious that it was written by an eight-year-old. I believe that the writing is fairly typical for eight-year-olds, though my kids aren't that old yet so I don't have a lot to compare it to. It's definitely clear that it's written by a kid, and she doesn't have a very good concept of story structure yet. It starts off saying, "A girl named Krista have [sic] always wished to become a superhero. Could I become a superhero? She thought."

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It's important to preserve the art of an eight-year-old.

Little Lost Lamb

March 1, 2020
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The metaphor breaks down when you examine it.

The shepherd is explicitly a boy, though it's not clear exactly how old he is. The sheep is an actual sheep, and not even a particularly useful one at that (black wool was less desirable). And I've read "Where the Red Fern Grows"-- I know that in a battle of dog vs. mountain lion, mountain lion usually wins.

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Sheep are worth risking your life over.

The Most Wonderful Doll in the World

February 23, 2020
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The most wonderful doll was inside you all along.

It's a fairly preachy book, but it doesn't really explain what it is she's doing wrong or whether she's aware of it. And then it doesn't really deal with the consequences. It's kind of like "Sam, Bangs, and Moonshine" except that where SBM has kind of an over-the-top consequence, this book really doesn't have any consequence.

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Your imagination is always better than reality. Or, reality/growing up sucks.

The Sunny Adventure

January 19, 2020
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Well, it's definitely sunny, and definitely an adventure.

The author is clearly an amateur, although quite prolific. It could be a lot shorter. It's hard to tell whether the author has potential or not. They definitely tried. It's a decent showing for an amateur.

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Don't eat your friends? "Friends are not betrayed"? You can't eat the sun?

Odd Dog Out

January 4, 2020
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Odd Books are In.

What is good about being different? Why is it good to be who you are? There's no justification for her coming to this conclusion or the feeling that the other characters have. It's just silly.

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Be different, because we said so.

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